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A Cloak and Dagger Junction ( a poem addressing teen age issues)

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Standing at an enigmatic confluence today,

I’m a chaperone to a bloody tussle,

A tussle between me and myself,

A tussle set to wrest me apart,

A tussle that throbs the core of my heart,

A tussle whose sequel shall festoon my tomorrow.

An uncanny cacophony clogs my mind,

My flesh reeks of rebellion,

My diaphragm feels a ceaseless thrust,

And tranquility with vehemence is pushed behind.

What were sacred dogmas yesterday,

Seem annoyingly didactic today,

Even I am bemused,

For the warm embrace cladding me in robes of security,

Today feels like the cruel clench of treacherous claws.

Barbs of eerie perceptions,

Urticate my tender tissues.

There is an urgent call to be blasphemous,

Especially to my partisan’s counsels,

Counsels which once were mottos of my life,

Counsels which were the embers of rectitude in me.

From a sanctimonious world,

Where I bragged of probity,

Now there is an exigency to step out,

To step out and enter an erroneous world.

The ingress, though I know ,

Would ensue delinquency,

I am not enough brawny to liquidate the impulse,

The Herculean impulse mangles my righteousness,

And tactfully inoculates me with provocation,

I can endure emphysema,

But not the urge to smoke,

I cannot give up the itch to sip in booze,

Rather be ready to endeavor a choke.

A bacchanalian grin pacifies,

A precipitous heart ,

Despite its ugly radiance,

The inceptive descent of sensuality,

Feels like the first touch of spring,

A voluptuous body illegitimately defines,

Love in my theseraus,

The heightened libido has a semblance to the restless waves,

The restless waves of a full moon night.

My heart and mind have got into a brawl,

To decide whether I am a callow or precocious,

But I feel , I feel as if I am prodigal,

Yes, prodigal dejectedly transformed from a prodigy,

I have voluntarily shoved aside,

The colossal barrel of nectar,

And I am struggling to gulp down the bitter poison,

I know its bitter but can’t resist the incitement,

The stench of a pernicious tomorrow,

Stimulates my olfactory lobes,

Though my previous sanctimonious world,

Extends its hands, ready to take me back,

I am woefully panglossian about the world I thrive in,

But I know, the synapse I stand today,

Cant bear me for long,

It’ll soon chuck me out,

For there are other trippers too.

I have to fabricate an abode,

An abode entitled to shelter me,

Shelter me when the junction will do away,

Lest I shall prepare to putrefy in a chasm,

A menacing, perilous chasm.

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mckaylaam
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Hi Barsha, I'm here for a quick review of your poetry. Let's jump right in!

The first thing that I noticed was that your poem is one large stanza, which may make it harder for some people to read. It's not always a bad thing, but it can sometimes make people more hesitant to read your writing if they see a large amount of text that isn't broken up. I would suggest breaking up your poem into a few smaller stanzas, if you're interested, as this would help with the readability.

The other thing I noticed is your choice of vocabulary with this piece - it's very sophisticated, and I haven't read any poems in a while that combines all of these more advanced words together. For me, much like DeliriumNervosa wrote in their review, it seems to make these "teen issues" that you write about have a greater importance since you're using vocabulary that more experienced individuals typically use, if that makes sense.

My favorite parts of the poem were when you wrote this

What were sacred dogmas yesterday
Seem annoyingly didactic today

and this
I can endure emphysema,
But not the urge to smoke,
I cannot give up the itch to sip in booze,
Rather be ready to endeavor a choke.


I really enjoyed reading this poem, and I look forward to seeing more from you. Keep up the great work! :)

Hi Barsha Priyadarshini kar,

I have just popped by to leave a small review for you. Wow this piece has some outstanding vocabulary in it! I love the use of such formal and advanced wording which creates an air of sophistication. It carries through the message that even though these may be "teen" issues, they are still important and everybody deals with things differently so of course everyone is going to see the magnitude of a problem differently.
The only suggestion I have is possibly editing the title. You could just call it "A Cloak and Dagger Junction" and put "A poem about teenage issues" in the description?

Please continue to write and I look forward to reading more of your work.

-Delirium Nervosa

Thank you so much. Will surely carry out these



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